Talk:Hills Hoist

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Contents 1 Patent Drawing 2 Confusing 3 References 4 Copyedit

[edit] Patent Drawing

Does anyone know if we could put this in the article? ...maelgwntalk 00:29, 18 January 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Confusing

The article doesn't detail the specific qualities of a hills hoist until almost 2/3 of the way through the article (in the features section). And it still doesn't make it clear what is the distinquishing feature; i.e. what makes hills hoist different than its predecessors. Pimlottc 15:00, 11 March 2007 (UTC)

[edit] References

This statement -

It is widely (and incorrectly) believed by the public to be an Australian invention.[2] However, other Australian and American precursors existed decades before it was produced in 1945 in the Adelaide suburb of Glenunga by Lance Hill.[3]

Refers to ref 2 and 3, yet there is no evidence that it is *not* an Australian invention. To that extent, the "(and incorrectly)" should be removed unless there is a reference to that effect. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 58.96.74.125 (talk) 09:58, 28 October 2007 (UTC)

Well, references 2 and 3 (see [1] and [2]) seem to contradict reference 1 (see [3]). So which is correct? --Joelster 23:09, 28 October 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Copyedit

I've copyedited the article to:

• remove advertising links and text;
• improve chronological order in the history section;
• remove repetition of Lance Hill being the inventor - this is an important and referenced point but it need not appear four times; and
• remove duplication of the benefits of Hills Hoists as well as some original research.

Any opposing views or comments about the rewrite are welcome - I'm, happy to revisit any point.

However I'd ask the advertising spam not be reinserted. A US marketing campaign to encourage people to buy clotheslines has relatively little to do with this article, and the constant addition of links to sites whose principal function is to sell products is a breach of Wikipedia's external links policy. Euryalus (talk) 07:25, 12 June 2008 (UTC)