Talk:Northwestern Consolidated Milling Company
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[edit] GA review
I've read this version, and this sentence from the lead makes no sense to me:
- The company was touched by an attempt at U.S. monopoly and became part of a Minneapolis oligopoly that valued in 1905 owned almost 9% of the country's flour and grist products.
For the history section, the article seems to be saying that there were no major technological advances during the life of this company. However, starting a section with "Technological advances in flour milling were already in place by the 1880s" was confusing. "From that point on and for the next 50 years, mergers and changes in business administration were the primary developments in the industry" is difficult to parse, and would work better by saying something like "mergers and administrative changes dominated the industry". This sentence is cited to footnote [3], which does not seem to support it.
Next paragraph; "Northwestern and their new Ceresota flour brand name were established..." How about "A group of businessmen led by... founded Northwestern in July 1891. The company was formed from six independent existing mills... Ceresota was the first flour brand name." Or something like that. The mention of "elevator" needs explaining.
I'm also not clear by the end of the article what actually became of this company, as the article is short on history after 1910. Because of this and the work needed on making the prose accessible, I do not feel comfortable promoting this article to GA. If you disagree, you may resubmit or seek a review at WP:GA/R. Gimmetrow 03:07, 4 June 2007 (UTC)
- Gimmetrow, thank you for the careful review. After standing back a few weeks I agree with you and will 1) make these copy edits, 2) try at the library to find some history after 1910, and 3) resubmit this for GA at a later date. Best wishes. -Susanlesch 16:38, 4 June 2007 (UTC)
[edit] more pictures
There are many PD pictures of Crown Roller Mill here: [1]--Appraiser 17:32, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
